Friday, July 15, 2011

Blog Hop Flash Fiction Story


I'm a little late in the day getting this up. I apologize. One of those days, you know? Hope it's not too late! Anyway, here's my blog hop flash fiction for the challenge.

Fourth of July Surprise

Every year, ever since I can remember, we lay out on the roof of the garage to watch the fireworks on the fourth of July. The reds and greens merging with the purples and whistling whites are but a stocatto to the chest thumping booms that set off the car alarms throughout the neighborhood.

None of us could hardly wait to see what they came up with for the finale. Every year it was something new. We watched with baited breath as the show commenced, getting ever more complex and loud until the final series of non-stop explosions hammered at us until we felt flattened to the garage.

And that was when I heard it. A high pitched scream that at first sounded like a whistler rocket, but it didn't stop. The scream just went on and on. I looked at my brother and he looked at me, then we looked back at the sky just in time to see a man falling toward us, a huge parachute billowing behind him. The guy was dressed like he came from World War II, and when he thumped onto the roof and started to skid we grabbed him and held on tight. He squatted down and pulled a gun around to the front of him, looking at the sky with absolute terror. "Where are they? Where's my troop? Oh, my, I'm gonna die, I'm gonna die!"

Time travel in the midst of a fireworks show. Who would have thought? Best. Show. Ever!

14 comments:

Lacie Myers said...

This started out like any old fourth of July, and then a man fell out of the sky! Great unexpected factor!

Brianna said...

Fabulous twist! Loved it!

Gail said...

I love the last line. That is classic. Great story.

Canda said...

I see a little science fiction coming into play. Fun take on the theme.

Debbie Davis said...

great surprise, a man falling out of the sky... crazy! Loved the story and the punch at the end!!

Cathy Witbeck said...

What a great twist. I loved this. Awesome, Karen.

Kayeleen Hamblin said...

Definitely not what I was expecting. Time travel rocks. That would totally be the best show ever.

ali said...

Ha! Totally unexpected! Great entry, Karen!

Nisa said...

That was a great surprise! lol! Very cute!

Nisa said...

Oh, and I love the new cover! It looks fantastic!

Mary Campbell said...

Interesting twist - need to know more now. We used to sit on my aunts garage eating popcorn the years that the fireworks were in Tooele. But no one ever dropped out of the sky ;)

Stacy Henrie said...

Awesome! I love all the different twists and takes on this theme.

Karen Hoover said...

Thanks, everyone! :)

Nisa, did you know I have an inspiring quote from you hanging on my wall to read and lift me up when I'm feeling low? It was taken from one of your comments in relation to humility. Just thought you might like knowing you're on my inspiration wall.

Donna K. Weaver said...

Best. Show. Ever! indeed. This was awesome.

And how come I wasn't already following you? That's fixed.